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Faceless Millions

by ~DesertShadow

Beep, Beep, Beep, Beep.
The sunrise,
        Get up... wake up...
As dawn sighs,
        Wash up... make-up...
The trees flow,
        Dress up... eat up...
But it's time now, go!
        Step up... gear up...
Step, Step, Step, Step.

Turn the Key,
        Pedal down...
As you leave,
        Window down...
Radio on,
        Volume down...
Pass green lawns,
        Drive down...
Into town,
        Traffic now...
Honk, Honk, Honk, Honk.

Buzz'n'Noise,
        No peace left...
You have no choice,
        No calm left...
Everyday,
        No time left...
You have no say,
        No fun left...
Office drive,
        No love left...
Lose your life,
        Take a left...
Blink, Blink, Blink, Blink.

Parking lot,
        Nothing's right...
Find your spot,
        Turn a right...
Neutral gear,
        Standing right....
Subliminal fear,
        Protect your right...
Release the brake,
        Cultural right...
For society's sake,
Ideal right...
Molded make,
Wish just right...
        NOTHING'S RIGHT
Slam, Slam, Slam, Slam.

Life is a constant beat, drum.
Life is a constant ca-dence.
Life is a constant Rhyth-m.
Life is a constant Move-ment.
Life is a constant step, sway.
Life is a constant flow, wave...

Echo back-

Beat, drum,
Ca-dence,
Rhyth-m,
Move-ment,
Step, sway,
Flow, wave,
Life is...
:icondesertshadow:
Did this for a school magazine- kinda fun.
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:iconskriver:
Really nice.

The cadence makes this thing, and you made nice use of single syllable words.

Good work.

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:iconjamvisdarava:
That's cool man ;) I like it. There's only one word to describe it too. Onomatopoeia :D

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:iconsankatze:
There's a real drummer writing - great rhythm, I can feel it! True 21st Century City poetry, I'd say :)
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:icondesertshadow:
*is very happy*
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:iconlauriel:
Honestly.....if more people wrote like this the world would be so much more interesting! I really like the uniqueness of this peice! this deserves a :+fav: ~Paige

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:iconroseofdarkness666:
*Whistles* Very nice. I am gonna put it on my faves. Great job!

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:icondiengod:
lol cool man, don't really doo poetry or anything like that, but it is cool.

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